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Franz Battles the Alien Robots by ryuuza-art Franz Battles the Alien Robots by ryuuza-art
Okay so the title is a lame take on The Flaming Lips' "Yoshimi Battles the Pink Robots", but I was struggling to come up with a decent one. :XD:

My half of an art trade with =Pharan through #HowToDrawManga. It's his character Franz from "Purelight" fighting an alien robot (which currently doesn't have a design so I made one up).
For his half he drew my Soulsnatchers character Alusius, which is pretty damn awesome (I was especially excited since no one else had drawn him before).


Since one of the goals of the HTDM trades is to practice drawing skills, I decided to go all out, especially since I haven't done many backgrounds/ environments as of late.

First off, many apologies for this being a week late. Unfortunately at the time the trades opened up, I didn't realise my job was going to carry on as long as it did. >_<

Second I hope the robot and world/ house tree designs are okay! Wasn't entirely sure what sort of thing to go for with the robot at first, but I felt that something like this might be a good fit.

I also went for an action piece in an effort to continue improving anatomy and foreshortening with my figures.

There's definitely a lot that needs work in this piece, given the time to work on it.
I suppose the main things I've noticed are as follows.
I realise that Franz's arms look a little disjointed compared to the rest of his body, and I don't think the angled plane of the cape is helping. Trees and rock texture really need some work and I'm not terribly convinced by the sunlight effects or the cloud and foreground shadows either (they don't seem to mesh with the colouring style).

However, I definitely feel that I'm still carrying on with the improvement streak that I've had as of late and I'm certainly not as afraid to try new stuff as I was a couple of years ago. I think the weekly drawing stuff has helped a lot in that regard.

Anywho, critique away! Any helpful advice would also be very welcome. :)

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Franz and Purelight :iconpharan:
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Nice work on the Ffoejian too. Honestly a bit retro, but definitely something I could work with.
I don't see anything wrong with Franz anatomy wise though.

I won't say much about textures and stuff. I honestly can't get it right yet myself most of the time.

As for colors and effects, I personally just do without the yellowness of the sun in the sky, and the lens flare. I'm sure that's largely a stylistic preference.

And one of the things you have to start doing when learning to paint is wrestling with the fact that sometimes shadowed areas are a different color from the directly lit areas.

Directly sunlit areas can reflect "real colors", but shadowed areas would not only be darker but also be tinted by light bouncing off of other things like the sky, grass or the soil/earth on the ground.

(don't mind the rating. dA won't let me skip it.)
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cubicdemigod Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
I'm going to be a bit quicker because I've already commented on so many deviations today..

Lighting and color both work well, seeming cohesive. I think you could've tried a different approach on the background. There's this drawing technique we call "atmospheric perspective" in portuguese which I think would work well here, which consists in simplifying information the further one is from the central focus, it helps increase field dept :)

I think that the two main characters look well in general. I do believe, however, that you cheated a bit on the robot, because it's right leg is obviously bigger than it should be, so he looks like he's holding onto the floor. As for the guy, I think he's body proportions are a bit off compared to the head. This also affects him because generaly drawn heroes are made so that they look taller in terms of proportion.

Oh, and the cut would've looked cooler if it was progressive. As it is, it looks like the robot was cut even before the sword crossed him completely
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ryuuza-art Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
Wow thanks very much! Can't say there's anything I disagree with after comparing with the drawing.
I especially agree with what you've said about the characters. I kept thinking Franz's head could probably do with being a bit smaller. I also found the cut a little tricky with getting the balance right between having him too far forward or back (he was originally further forward but he seemed a bit disconnected from the robot), but I'll definitely take that on board next time I do something like this.
With the robot's leg, I can see what you mean. I'll admit I did cheat a little due to running low on time. The lineart originally looked a bit too flat, so I tilted the backdrop and tried to put some perspective in it's far leg. Should have just reconfigured the sketch and reinked it. >_<

Anyway thanks again, there are some really helpful points here. :D
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cubicdemigod Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
I'm happy you think I was helpful ^^
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ryuuza-art Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
I always appreciate well thought out critiques. :)
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Pharan Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Student General Artist
This is awesome. I can't believe you actually put everything I described. XD The houses, the lake, the mountains. You really didn't have to. This must have been a lot of work. XD Great stuff.

I'll just post a crit (as per HTDM rules apparently, and you asked. XD)
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ryuuza-art Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
Excellent, I'm glad you like it! :D
Also glad that the Ffoejian design is somewhat useable too, since I've not had much experience at all with drawing robots.
Thanks again for the critique too, I'm definitely going to find it useful. :)
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Liieszz Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Student General Artist
I like the way you made the sun effect :3 it's a nice drawing, it also shows alot of movement and i like that! <3
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ryuuza-art Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
Aw thank you very much (and for the forum comment too!). Glad you like it. :)
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Liieszz Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Student General Artist
You're very welcome! <33
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